How would you rewrite this? (Just a short, simple paragraph!)?

[aly]

Something about this sounds... clunky? I'm not sure how to rewrite it, though. Any help would be really appreciated. Thanks!
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You are unique. You are talented. You have a bright future ahead of you.

Whenever you start to think those depressing thoughts, just remember: Your sadness is kind of like a dark cloud. Your bright future, then, is the sun. When the clouds stop the sun from shining, does the sun cease to exist? Nope. Even if we can't see it, it's still there. We just have to wait for the clouds to pass, and the sun will shine brighter than ever before.

 

[corgi800]

You did really well. A bit of polishing will make this little beauty shine!

You are unique. You are talented. You have an amazing future ahead of you.

So, whenever you start to think those depressing thoughts, just remember; your sadness is a dark cloud, your future the sun. It shines brightly, gives you warmth, gives you purpose and life. When the clouds keep the sun from reaching you, the does not cease to exist. You can't see it, but it's still there. The storm will pass, and the sun will shine brighter than ever before.

 

[TRD]

your sadness is like a dark cloud. take out the 'kind of'. your bright future is the sun. take out 'then'. change nope to no.

 

[frank]

You are unique. You are talented. You have a bright future ahead of you.

Whenever you start to think those depressing thoughts, just remember: Your sadness is like a dark cloud. Your bright future is the sun. When the clouds stop the sun from shining, does the sun cease to exist? Not in the slightest way. Even if we can't see it, it's still there. We just have to wait for the clouds to pass, and the sun will shine brighter than ever before.

This is quite touching good job!