So need advice on my poem what do you think? Corrective criticism is welcome. Please

msconfused113

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let me know u'r opionion The labyrinth of Life


Turning,
Never knowing,
If right or left is front.
The Labyrinth of life.

I face you,
You face me,
An illusion,
But lone I seek.

These passages,
I reach the exit,
But it’s a delusion,
A fantasy in my mind.

I’ve vanished to no where,
Mazed in the passages,
My mind lost,
Lost for you, or you.

One way was right,
It was left,
I glower above,
The growth surrounding me.

It’s defeating
It entangles my persistence,
My diligence,
The vines bind to the clear sky.

The labyrinth of life,
Always twisting, turning,
A garden of death,
The egress obscure.

I look down,
A white spider flower,
Creeps, creeps across the ground,
And into my searching soul.
 
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