I think you've missed that what you need is a compelling plot and characters who people care about.
If your compelling plot has character death in it, sure, go for it. But you can't make a plot compelling just by throwing gore at it.
" I mean, death happens all the time, right?"
Yes, but the...
" This will be the last question about this topic"
" I swear I will never ask this same question again."
You said this yesterday too. Why would we believe you this time?
Go find a different hobby, if you don't want to write.
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I'll tell you which story plot has given me the most nightmares over the years. It's from Alan Garner's "Weirdstone of Brisingamen" and the protagonists are being chased through caves. The only way out is an _incredibly_ narrow tunnel (think rabbit hole) and at one point there is a flooded sump...
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Because writing is an art. Where else would you put it?
If you want to ask specifically about the "book" nature of what you are writing, it goes here. If you want to ask about the science, it goes in the science section. And so on.
There are thousands. They've all been vanity published, because they're, to be blunt, dull.
I don't want to read someone else's recap of being a girl in high school. I've been a girl in high school and it was thoroughly boring. I want to read things which are interesting, different, uplifting...
You need to pick a tense and stick with it - this wanders randomly around between past and present.
Apart from that? Why don't you pick something you know about and care about, instead of trying to reproduce teen wangst which you won't even have experienced yet? The main problem this has is...
Doesn't exist. Sorry. We don't have that sort of upper class.
Unless you mean a novel written a couple of hundred years ago, when working class people probably couldn't read and write. Still won't be written using what you seem to think is a whole other dialect, though.
You could try Jane...
Gee, three logic argument questions from three different accounts in the past few minutes. What's the chance?
Reported as spam. Your sockpuppet accounts, too.
She's afraid that if she turns him loose he'll betray her, and too squeamish to kill him?
You're asking yourself the wrong question, though. It shouldn't be "How do I keep this character in the story?" - it should be "Do I keep this character in the story?" And, honestly, it sounds like your...
It's too preachy and all-knowing.
Your character is 17. These people are her friends. Why is she friends with them at all if they are so completely, fundamentally different from her? Yes, this is the idea everyone has at her age, _including her_.
It's B. Chemical behaviour is pretty much entirely determined by electron structure - the nucleus is so tiny that it isn't involved (when it is involved, you're studying particle physics reactions). Going down, for instance, the first group, they all have one electron in the valence shell.
I'm...