Can you visualise this? Would you read more? Very short description.?

superlconfused

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I am trying to actually start my novel. I can imagine it all but I find it so hard to write things down, I have just decided to get on with it but I am thinking of opening it like this:

Where the heart once sat beating, a ragged hole had been chewed. An arm was missing, a leg snapped and an eyeball bulging from its deformed socket. Drying blood covered the skin that remained on the carcass, sticking to the concrete floor.

I know it isn't much, but are you at all interested? Does it make sense? Can you see the body?
Thanks.
 
This is great! Is it about zombies? I can totally see the body and yes it would make a person want to read on but not me for no other reason than I don't really like this kind of story. Good luck!x
 
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