IlLovelBootslMylKitten
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this is what I've got!!!? How do you like it? Any ideas for another verse about something awesome?
Simple Miracles
A caterpillar creeps and crawls and lollygags along,
And she munches and she crunches,
On a bright green leaf she lunches,
And watches as a robin sings a sweet long morning song.
She swiftly spins a soft cocoon, by circling round and round,
And she hurries in a flurry,
The cocoon so soft and furry,
And soon the caterpillar, in the tender cocoon she’s bound.
After some weeks, one night bleak, the cocoon shook, it stirred, it creaked.
It’s no mistake, it quakes and shakes,
And suddenly it starts to break,
She dried her wings and out a beautiful butterfly peeked.
Now is that not a miracle?
You can’t say they don’t exist.
A simple, sweet, small miracle,
A gift from God, some people missed,
The concept of a miracle,
So easy to understand,
Something unexplainable, wonderful, or grand.
The sweet showers, sprinkle, softly, down, no sunshine is in sight,
The grey storm clouds won’t blow away,
Their sadness, worry, or dismay,
It’s a wonder if the world will ever again be bright.
Suddenly, swiftly, the sunshine rips right through the cloud,
Though stormy clouds still drain their rain,
The water drops, are not in vain,
For out of the air bursts something so beautiful, so proud.
Seven, swirling, strands of color shoot into a bright arc,
God’s promise to maintain flood rain,
A wonder that one can’t explain,
Its beauty and its glory seem to set of a new spark.
I want a whole lot of alliteration and assonance. I know that the first verse is better than the second, but if there's any other comments, suggestions, etc. feel welcome to 'comment and crticize!' but please remember im only fourteen so its no gonna be perfect people!
Simple Miracles
A caterpillar creeps and crawls and lollygags along,
And she munches and she crunches,
On a bright green leaf she lunches,
And watches as a robin sings a sweet long morning song.
She swiftly spins a soft cocoon, by circling round and round,
And she hurries in a flurry,
The cocoon so soft and furry,
And soon the caterpillar, in the tender cocoon she’s bound.
After some weeks, one night bleak, the cocoon shook, it stirred, it creaked.
It’s no mistake, it quakes and shakes,
And suddenly it starts to break,
She dried her wings and out a beautiful butterfly peeked.
Now is that not a miracle?
You can’t say they don’t exist.
A simple, sweet, small miracle,
A gift from God, some people missed,
The concept of a miracle,
So easy to understand,
Something unexplainable, wonderful, or grand.
The sweet showers, sprinkle, softly, down, no sunshine is in sight,
The grey storm clouds won’t blow away,
Their sadness, worry, or dismay,
It’s a wonder if the world will ever again be bright.
Suddenly, swiftly, the sunshine rips right through the cloud,
Though stormy clouds still drain their rain,
The water drops, are not in vain,
For out of the air bursts something so beautiful, so proud.
Seven, swirling, strands of color shoot into a bright arc,
God’s promise to maintain flood rain,
A wonder that one can’t explain,
Its beauty and its glory seem to set of a new spark.
I want a whole lot of alliteration and assonance. I know that the first verse is better than the second, but if there's any other comments, suggestions, etc. feel welcome to 'comment and crticize!' but please remember im only fourteen so its no gonna be perfect people!