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Please evaluate my self styled poem.thanks..oh ROSE?
Title:

Priceless Treasure



I am on the edge of the threshold ,with desire

Where can we alone in this wilderness meet,

As the air perfumes fill my nostrils with love,
As if holding your hands in my dreams,
A one time fantasy, a breath from younder
I pick you up, up in the air,
No one ever thought that such would happen,

Until ur hands felt my hands,

Desire spilled from my very being,
Nothing remained but my moisty hands,
As I smelt my palms, ur face came up,

From nowhere,as a spring of emotion rose
At once I saw u in front of my eyes emerging,
As if from no where,as u know
It was then that Irealised it was u,Dear ROSE.



22 minutes ago - 3 days left to answer.
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3 minutes ago

please amend

u =you
ur= your and all abbrev also sorry
thanks 4 the advice and good comments

time taken first draft only ==7 minutes
1 second ago

ANOTHER ONE AS REQUESTED THANX 4 UR ENCOURAGEMENT

Candy

How I miss my candy,
When I learnt I lost her,
I felt really randy,
But could not believe the news

As I was not prepared for it,
Also I had to keep it secret,
So as not to disclose
At a time others weren’t prepared,
To accept such a sad news,
When enjoyment came by after,
It was a great time and rare.

So I kept it secret, though I knew,
Candy will not be there
For me when I did return,
But at times one has to suffer alone,
In the heart of heart one has to moan,
Grieve and silently shed a tear,
Before one shares such bad news.
Oh Candy is dead,
Alas its sad and saddest news
.
Well dear Candy, we served each other,
This in the new world always remember.
No more shall I now keep a pet,
Dear Candy, I do not want to again regret.

Fare thee well Dear Candy.