My first "happy" poem...PLEASE help!!?

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Okay, a few people (on and off of Yahoo) have asked me to write a poem that isn't sad or morose. So, this is my first attempt, and I'm unsure of whether I should keep writing positive things- this one seems a bit cliche, but you'll help me figure it out, right? The comments on this poem will decide my next attempt at a cheerful poem. If I fail, I will hang up my happy face badge for sure

(Searching for a good title)

A bright palette adorns my skies,
Your soft embrace and dancing eyes.
Arched, gentle, you cradle my heart,
Beauty complete in all your parts.

I ache, needing to hold you close,
Your passive charm, a lethal dose,
Your smile is everywhere to me,
The air I breathe, the world I see.

Your violet moods, blood red lips,
Hands outstretched to my sinking ship.

I'd drown without you, my sole light,
Your absence leaves pale black and white.

Yet, when it rains, the sun shines through,
To leave behind a perfect you.
Always present, both high and low,
You're my miracle, my rainbow.

[sierra]

Wow! That is and incredicle poem! =] I definetly like happy poems more than sad ones.

[saveitok]

Smiling Soul.....i like it

[bballgurlie03]

That's amazing to me. You're really good. :]
Continue with the happy, I love it.
Title: Lost Without You

Good Luck!!

[Jenny]

Wow! Don't you dare give up happy! the last stanza was
wonderful, at your age now you will soar in the future.
This is a Kudos, Blessings

[TheDarkPrince]

I like it very much. I might tinker with the wording...an ongoing adventure but this is almost to final status. I might think of a different word that rainbow to end on...it is a bit cliche'. Other than that ...Bravo. I enjoyed this very much.