What do you think of the song I wrote?

Sheltered

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It's supposed to be slow song, with clean vocals. I have to write a song and present it to the band I joined, but I feel this isn't good (my first song ever)

With this gun held high
I chose my destiny*
There is not much more internal suffering I can endure...*
Its time to take a stand.

With memories of a perverted childhood that never seems to fade like these scares placed upon my wrist. The pain is too great.
*Not much longer will I decide my*fate.

I know suffering all to well. I waited for the day that I'd live without regret. It's time to empty myself.

Here I am, broken open, I'm here alone.... waiting to let go.

With this gun in hand
I can finally decide my fate
This is.... a suicide initiative*
... Im taking a stand

Do me a favor, save your breath, this is the end of me and there's no turning back.
Just sit back and watch me fade away.

Here I am, broken open, I'm here alone.... waiting to let go.

Theses memories just don't seem to go way....

*Please don't shed a tear, don't live with my regrets.

*gun clicks, boom*
 
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