I wrote this song, is it any good?

TerryM

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Jul 19, 2008
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I wrote a first verse and chorus and I just want a little constructive criticism. Thanks:

Verse:
Hes got a big bright smile that lights up the town.
Dreamy brown eyes that sendsigns without make a sound.
Annd I can't help but fall in love with him.
And I don't know his name
And I dont know his game
Oowoah
Chorus:
But who is he?
And. who am I.?
Where do we began?
And where do we end.?
Who owns the key to my heart. I'm just trying to find my first page, my start
 
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