I am confident this pretty much sucks, but its my first try at non-schoolboy poetry, so I would like opinions, if you don't mind.
Dawn
Alone and again
Bloodied knife and slamming door
Open windows seep pain
Sol’s arms warm souls
Dead hearths chill hearts
Gum-filled prints on shirt-backs
Wants washed down drains
Yet love remains
Dusk
A lone remains
Cheese knife and open door
Closed windows exclude rain
Warm minds warm souls
Banter. Laughs
Gum-taste kisses. Hair swept back
Needs on their knees
And love remains.
JMPC
Dawn
Alone and again
Bloodied knife and slamming door
Open windows seep pain
Sol’s arms warm souls
Dead hearths chill hearts
Gum-filled prints on shirt-backs
Wants washed down drains
Yet love remains
Dusk
A lone remains
Cheese knife and open door
Closed windows exclude rain
Warm minds warm souls
Banter. Laughs
Gum-taste kisses. Hair swept back
Needs on their knees
And love remains.
JMPC