does this poem make you cry?

[storm]

I made it my self, here it is:

Yellow Eyes
Cory William Slawecki.


We've roamed the wild country
My beautiful yellow eyes,
Side by side we've hunted
Shadows dancing on northern skies.

There have been times of plenty
We were content and serene,
Peacefully sleeping
Dangers few and far between.

We've also known much hunger
Ribs protruding from each side,
Mournfully we howled
When our starving cubs had died.

And then there was our first winter
Romping thru the glistening snow,
Tasting each crystal snowflake
Falling gently to and fro.

Ah my dear, sweet yellow eyes
I've known no greater love,
Without you, I am nothing
Our wild souls are one.

And now you lay there dying
Steel jaws upon your frame,
Life's blood slowly seeping
I whimper your sweet name.

Helpless, I watch you struggle
Chest heaving with labored breath,
Steel jaws clenching tighter
Winds whisper the song of death.

The blood has now stopped flowing
I know the time is near,
And you will forever leave me
My love, my life, my dear.

And now my world is silent
Your struggles now have ceased,
I lay my head upon you
And know you are at peace.

Perhaps your soul has lifted
To skies where eagles soar,
And there you'll greet your brothers
To run with them forever more.

And someday I shall find you
In the heaven's so far above,
And when our wild soul's unite
There'll be no greater love.
my eyes water every time i read it
if you read it aloud it has more of an effect.
if you read it aloud it has more of an effect.

[Jung'sDog]

Vary good. I didn't expect to see the words "to and fro" in the same poem with "song of death". One seems to be reaching and the other a cliche. It is quite telling and engaging if not personal and glimpsing.

[Sadie]

i didn't cry but then again, i'm not one to usually do so. it was very sweet and i liked it though.



btw, there are apostrophes where none are needed (ex: heaven's so far above, wild soul's unite-->heavens, souls)...just trying to be helpful cause i really did like it