"Hands" one of my 'sweeter' poems. written bc my bf asked me to write sumthing...

"Hands" one of my 'sweeter' poems. written bc my bf asked me to write sumthing...

...ab us. comments welcome Hands interlinked,
Walking slowly down the street.
Every moment savored and true,
Why can't I spend more time with you?

Love is a battle that we fight,
It rages on and on outside,
In the world we live in.
Yet the world is silent and at peace,
When I am next to you.

Staying close, or at least we try.
But attempts are all that matter sometimes.
Sweet hugs and quick kisses,
Soft whispered words,
That show how much we care.

Hands interlinked.
Sometimes that's all it takes to feel the love,
Set the mood,
And make the date.

A pop song, yes.
A poem, hell no!

1 The subject matter is...probably not the best.
2 The language is so boring. Use some imagery, at least.
3 Not a single structural oddity. No enjambment, anacrisis or anything.
4 The vocabulary is that of a 10-year-old. "Every moment savoured and true". Of course every moment is true, it happened, didn't it. Don't just put words in to acheive rhyme, unless you want to give the appearence of a child's poem.