what do you think of this introduction for my narrative essay, HELP PLEASE 10 PTS?

I have some changes that I'd like to make to your essay to make it sound better and get you a better grade. I will make the changes surrounded in asterisks. (*)

Because of the difference in lifestyles between Europe and the US, moving to America was *both challenging and frightening.* (Adding the word frightening makes the senses more intrigued!) First *off*, the English *that I had learned* in *Europe was not suited enough for me to be able to successfully interact with other students.* Although we had some distant family that helped us (eject the word "out"), once we *arrived here*, (overt to me* it still felt *as if* we were in the middle of nowhere for quite *some* time. Everything was different, from the atmosphere *to the* school, food, and sports. Soccer *not being as popular as it was in Europe made me want to go back, but I knew that it was not an option.* I had played soccer all of my life, and all of the sudden*,* I came to a place where everyone is talking about hitting a ball with a bat, something totally irrelevant in Europe. At first I could *not* (couldn't is not formal for an essay) believe how long school lasted*.* It seems liked I was there for the whole day. Nothing seemed to be right, and after the first couple of months*,* all I wanted to do *was* (keep past tense) go back to *Europe,* where I *spent* (keep past tense) most of my life.

Your essay is overall very touching, and it provided me with a lot of knowledge as to the cultural differences between Europe and the US. Essay well taken! Any other questions, please e-mail me.