"Hey can you look at this" ?

[loser1333]

Can you take a look at this I really need your opinion?
Tell me what you think about this song I wrote....be honestly.
This song is called:"It's Just a Play on Words"

I've got it,I've got it
I've got it and you don't
I've got it,I've got it

I heard nothing but good things about you
trying your hardest at something I could so easily do
Take out your sketchbook,you drew your pictures
of your fantasy's which is reality for me

So has she told you ,I know shes told you
the things that we would do, it was something like porn
Yeah and I know she liked it, hell no she loved it
but she'll never admit it

She's in love and he's in love too
Don't be jealous when I tell you, I got far
and that's more then what I can say for you

She's in love and he's in love too
But don't be jealous when I tell you I need loved her
That makes me better then you

I heard somethings but they were only whispers
you're such a sucker, you haven't ever kissed her
How do you feel when she talks about me
I just know that you cant take it
but have would you take it

Telling her that you don't mind
but it really makes you want to vomit
Yeah so next time when you think your a winner
just remember you're still only second best
You're still only second best

She's in love and he's in love too
Just don't be jealous when I tell you, I got far
and that's more then what I can say for you
She's in love and he's in love too
But don't be jealous when I tell you I need loved her
That makes me better
That makes me better then you

I've got it,I've got it
I've got it,I've got it

I only gave her what she really wanted
yeah and I know she wanted it
That's more then what I can say for you

I just gave her what she really wanted
yeah and I know she wanted it
I make it out like a winner
so what does that make you

[smokeupjhonnyt]

Your not a loser
spencer.t

[TrendSetter]

YOU SHOULD NEVER PUT YOUR LYRICS OUT FOR THE PUBLIC!!!!!!!!!!!!!! what r u thinking?????????

[wormy]

you almost had it

[Yakko]

Very cool.


Star for you.