in 9th grade (age 13-14) is it good? Oh, I realize that sometimes,
I do nothing but complain,
But don't you see that in those times,
I've got the right to blame?

The thing that really bugs me,
Which I can't take from my mind,
Is that I try and try to find them,
But your thoughts I never find.

I also doubt you think of me,
They way I think of you,
Because it shows in how you are,
And all the things you do.

I wish that you'd just tell me,
If you want to separate,
Cause' I'll be broken pieces,
If you continue at this rate.

I just need to know one thing,
Before the sun falls from above,
Did you ever feel this way,
What many say is love?

Did you ever understand,
the hurt I felt inside,
When the affection you gave me,
Turned back just like the tide?


Or did you expect me to understand,
Whatever you were thinking,
I couldn't think of how you felt,
Without my spirits sinking.

I still hope that you and I,
Can be each other's friend,
I also hope that broken hearts,
And achy souls can mend.
I would also like technical feedback, on my writing. Too many commas? periods? Too simple format? Its my preferred style: kinda sonnet style, lol