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    Rate my anime story this is my first time writing a story of this type willing

    to take opinions on what to add? Vengence
    As a giant armored warrior and his brother are walking out of the hidden forest they are soon attacked by a giant robot before the brothers even make a move there pet squirrely has already activated his amour and is flying above the robot firing small metal acorns at the robot piercing the robot causing it to explode. The warriors continue on there journey as if the robot never attacked after a while of walking there come to a village in the village the bigger brother precedes to go and look for a place to stay. While the younger brother walks around the village looking around “he sees a cute girl” after a while he walks with the girl into a dark alley. Unexpected to him from out of the near by shadows comes a figure that quickly heads at the warrior but the warrior quickly dodges as a figure walks out of the shadow and it is a little kid. As the warrior tries to figure out what happened more figures come flying out of the shadow at the warrior. The warrior precedes to active the gauntlet on his arm as 2 small blades grow out of his gauntlets. With a quick motion the warrior slashes two of the figures as black liquid stars gushing from them. The warrior realizing the black liquid is oil proceeds to attack the figures with out stopping but more and more keep coming until the warrior tries to run out of the alley but the robots grab him the scene switches back to the armored warrior who is talking to a lady at an inn looking for rooms. But the lady says there are no more rooms so he leaves the place. Out side the place he realizes that he hasn’t seen his brother in a while so he tells his squirrel to go looking for him. While the squirrel is looking around out of a building comes the younger warrior the squirrel goes up to the warrior and proceeds to squeak the warrior understands as the squirrel leads him back to the armored warrior. The armored warrior tells him there are no places to stay so they begin to head out of the village after a while they come to a spot that can be used as a place to make camp. After a while the warriors fall asleep as the younger warrior decides to be watch out after a while of watch out the younger warrior moves over to the armored warrior unknown to him squirrely has woken up and watches as the younger warrior is about to attack but squirrely activates his amour then fires at the warrior hitting his hand the warrior jumps back as squirrelly stops firing at him the warrior then precedes to go after squirrelly as he continues to fire but the warrior dodges the acorns he then grabs squirrelly and is about to crush him when the warrior punched through by the armored warrior as the warrior stands there with oils gushing from the hole he drops squirrelly the warrior tries to attack but is destroyed from the damage of the punch realizing that it was a copy of oh his brother Hazori knowing that if it was the real one he would not have been able to hit him so easily. The armored warrior and squirrelly rush back to the village from the day before. As they go into the village he proceeds to look around after a while he notices that he doesn’t hear a sound he goes to the inn from the day before he looks around but all the rooms are empty as he leaves the inn squirrelly jumps off his shoulder and runs off the armored warrior follows him until “they come to the building the Hazori robot copy came out of” as soon as they reach the door out of no were comes the towns people that could not be found before the warrior says were is his brother but the towns folk do not answer starting to get mad he yells louder but they still do not answer as squirrelly walks towards the door all the towns folk attack them squirrelly actives his collar as his body is covered in amour he then flies up as he begins to attack them with great speed destroying them as he bites through them with his metal teeth. Realizing that all the people are robots the armored warrior then produces a sword from his amour and starts to destroy robots with each slash the armored warrior seeing that there enemy is so weak and squirrelly can easily destroy them he heads for the door going into the building a green light flash across him as he walks down a large stair case as he goes deeper he begins to see all these machines that are putting parts together and making more robots as he continues down he comes to a room full of cells and in the cells he notices a girl he walks over to the door cell and punches it down the girl is laying on the ground not moving he tries to wake her up as he touches her though her eyes open up. The warrior realizes that the girl is a robot as one of her eyes looks cybernetic the girl then says thank you machine for helping me. *The warrior thinks to himself that she thinks he’s a robot.* He then asks her has she seen his brother then describes him a little. The girl says yea they took him away thankful for being freed she says she will lead him to were they brought him she say
    she will lead him to were they brought him she says her name is RIN the armored warrior replies his name is Kiyoshirai they precede to leave the place but right before leaving RIN begins to destroy all them machines which causes a fire Kiyoshirai and RIN then head out of the building just as Squirrelly finishes off the rest of the towns folk. They leave the village just in time as a giant explosion comes from the lab destroying the entire village. Kiyoshirai then asks RIN to hurry and lead the way as Kiyoshirai and RIN quickly head away from the giant crater in the ground that was the town. { as RIN and Kiyoshirai leave the village unknown to them the ones sent to get RIN have come to find the village destroyed from a nearby tiny spy bot they are showed a video of what happens they contact there leader telling them that RIN and a armored warrior are heading in the direction of the Factory} After a while Kiyoshirai and RIN and come to the factory its a huge building with a large amount

    she will lead him to were they brought him she says her name is RIN the armored warrior replies his name is Kiyoshirai they precede to leave the place but right before leaving RIN begins to destroy all them machines which causes a fire Kiyoshirai and RIN then head out of the building just as Squirrelly finishes off the rest of the towns folk. They leave the village just in time as a giant explosion comes from the lab destroying the entire village. Kiyoshirai then asks RIN to hurry and lead the way as Kiyoshirai and RIN quickly head away from the giant crater in the ground that was the town. { as RIN and Kiyoshirai leave the village unknown to them the ones sent to get RIN have come to find the village destroyed from a nearby tiny spy bot they are showed a video of what happens they contact there leader telling them that RIN and a armored warrior are heading in the direction of the Factory} After a while Kiyoshirai and RIN and come to the factory its a huge building with a large amount

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