What you think of my poem? please?

[Arlene B]

1st 1 for a shy and dreamy mood..... 2nd one 4 a sexy and daring mood.. wat i'm sayin is it depends on ur mood and how he will feel when he recieves tha poem

[arklatexrat]

i luv it!it explains every part of a girls life!tht was awesome!keep writing girl!

[arizonawolfman]

you can't spell, you can't rhyme, you don't understand the different poetry formats>>thus these are not poems. i felt like i was reading a note that i'd find in the hall at my highschool...only dumber

[arizona_iced_te4]

first line..i think you mean.."through" sixth line.."so do" 12th "if it's"//third form bottom..."though"second 1"sexy body" and "huge rush" and "crush" just dont do it 4 a love poem...3rd line from bottom..."every dissapperas"?? everything disappears i think you mean..last line.."their"..should be "there's "...listen grammar REALLY IS IMPORTANT when your medium ( the choice of material you use in your art) is words..think about itbut they are both nice..sorry to be critical..butu it DOES matter when you feel THAT strong but you are creating so go for it.

[arklatexrat]

i like your poems there good. first one better dont like it when girls talk about sexy bodies on guys its realy annoying.

[Arman A]

wow both r really deep and well written very wonderful and lusty peoms