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[killerbird979]

yelling pressuring from both sides
his voice is drowned by all else
they think their lives are so much harder.
as they scold him with their whip lashing words.
anger burning up inside.
because he has to please everyone
yelling pressuring from both sides
begging for another chance
they all say retard
you god damn loser
the urge to start screaming
because questioning their actions
means that hes giving an attitude
he has to say sorry
becuause he dont want to be punished
but he dont give a damn
who cares if he punished for saying what he think
his voice needs to be heard
maybe you can listen to him for once

maybe you can feel his pain
of what he's going through!
maybe you can shudder
just liek he shudderd at your words
stop yelling at him!
you never have been on the other side
you don't know him at all
im trying to portray how an angry teenager would feel at the world. ihave wrote poems ever since i was 28. tell me what you think of it!

[rayofsunshine]

i am too old to relate but it sounds like this kid is really tormented