Parody of Low T-Pain?

is this any good? I made it and I need some suggestions...

Kentucky Fried Chicken [Chicken]
Drinks with the ice [ice]
He had the whole world eating chicken rice.
Dropped on the floor,
must have some more
The price is low low low low low

MacDonalds with some fries
And Big mac with the cheese
They turned around and gave Big Ronald a smack
They at some chicken
Nex thing you know
The price is way low low low low low

give me ur feedback!
PLz do not say its urs and copy it. I made it in moi own time and if you want to share it with ur friends or something plz tell me
MacDonalds with some fries
Big mac with some cheese
They turned around and gave Big Ronald some snack
They ate some chicken
Next thing you know
The price is way low low low low low

It is brilliant well done. Have a star.

the second half could use some work but itts good

Ugh, sorry but i hate fast foods so it makes me feel sick

That is the sh**! I love it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!


please give me best answer i need to get to level 3!
If i could give as many stars as i wanted iwould give you
infinity!

good one.....excellent
very funny ..... loved it .....gave me a good laugh
.....good job.....keep up the good ones