Im 15 and have written an albums worth of lyrics. what do u think of my latest song? Best Answer gets ten points. Please comment.

Exile in Laizia

Satanica!
Spilling on Her tomb
Serve thee from the inside
Sever the thin faded line
I walk this path - away

So beautiful
In ball gowns
Walk this line

The dreams of them
All hope is fading
Of their Christ

(Doom)

And the dawn will greet their bloody corpses
Only in Laizia,
Tear the wounds of strangled men
Funereal dressed supremacy
I bathe in the blood of virgin sacrifice, again

Their moon of worlds will end,
Slay – their – Lord and deliver me from evil
Let thee arise,
She came to reign the skies
Unveil thy rapture - Embrace the silence
Of a thousand years in exile to begin

“When poisons gasped laughter
They’re in with a gaseous fraud
Lovers of death slept in silhouette
Like open tombs of moons at war.”
In sillhou(evil)ette
Tunnels of light to bend
I admit in all truth,
Our Elder few
Still fear the likes of flight by them

Suffer in pity with the worthless
At dusk when the Goddess is born
Laced are the wings of the nightly unholy
We creep from the dust into the light of dawn

Christian faith will end
Slay – their – Lord from preternatural evil
Within Her eyes,
The secrets of the blind
To believe the world of this disease
When the prophecy begins

“We as one, rise and fulfil your prophecy
In vein to reclaim your legacy
I come again over the moonlight agony
Over tides they plead to soldier on.”

Creeping on themes, gilded, He bleeds
The Yeshua, blinded lay asleep
All in hope we grieve, a soliloquy
I sever the holy knot of the Trinity…

Entombed by sheath,

Going down with the Holy Spirit, Father and a thousand suns

Growing near
I face the terror
And the silences within
In vein the Christian warlord bled
To deliver me from sin

Exile in Laizia
Nightfall claims my dreams
A thousand years on, but Her memory lives on
As She rides the night with me

Satanica!
Risen from Her tomb
Christian faith is denied
Sever the thin faded line
I take my veins away.

So beautiful
When chained down
Walk this line.

Cythereran
- Your pulse is fading
Walk this line.