Damsel McDreamy

DREAM

I dream of a day when
The sun shone smoothly
Under the enormous
Dome of the sky

Where here and there
I see a ladybird on a leaf
A cute creature crawling
Colors of nature appealing

Where fainter and farther away
I see gleams of glittering
Shadow smiling significantly
To the islets of the sea

Where left and right
I see couples madly in love
A man-made heaven with
Angels sent from above.

Thanks foggisan. I didn't proofread it, i straightaway post it after writing it impromptu.

TD Euwaite™

The one word I didn't like was 'significantly.' It seemed too hard. The rest was nice and soft. Good to be back.

foggisan

To get the tenses working properly I would change one word - shone (L2) to shines. Other than that it reads well.