Thread: What do you think of this Poem?

ok i wrote this like a few minutes ago and don't know if it's good or if people will get it. Lemme know thanks




Teen years
At times the world is dark
Then the sun shines and brings hope
Your body grows to fit the shape of your soul
Your friends are there but their hearts have changed
Confusion is a factor
An identity is emerging
People recognize you as a person
Your pain becomes visible
No one can help you
Loneliness and companionship cross your mind
School disappears from sight
You’re on your feet and have no where to go
Pressure is building
Envy flows in your veins
People crowd you and you can’t break free
The love off your life becomes your greatest enemy
Tormentors of the past become your soul mates
Your mind can’t focus

It becomes harder to breath
There is no escaping what might happen next
You realize what is out there, but are too scared to check
You dream of the past, and try to eliminate the future
You lay still in bed
Counting the ticks of time
Your life is ending sooner and sooner
Your only hope is the Lord
Being a teenager is hard, and you are stuck in a time capsule until your twentieth Birthday
Start counting the days

pretty good how old were you?

Wow thats really good... i love how you incorparated the lord within that. At some points i got confused but other wise it was really good!
I love writing poems as well that incorparate my beliefs, so this is really cool!
Good luck writing!