edit my poem?

[Cris]

Number the Stars by Lois Lowry
Courage by Crystal Kim

It’s what leads us down the right path
It’s what makes us fight for good
It’s what causes us to do what’s right
And do what we never could

It isn’t always obvious
It doesn’t always show
It isn’t what it seems
And this isn’t what you know

It’s when you trust in others
It’s when you try your best
It’s when you do your hardest
And you reach up for success

It’s in the old, frail, and weak
It’s in the young, small, and meek
It’s in the hurt and in the “freaks”
It’s in you and you and me

Nobody is ever too small,
Too weak or too young,
It’s in each and every one of us
Shown boldly or unsung,

You may not be the smartest
The strongest or the brightest
But knowing what you can achieve
Will pass the final test

Even if you have some doubts
Even if you have regrets
And even if you have some fears

There’s one thing we can’t forget
It takes strength to be harsh
It takes courage to be gentle
It takes strength to be brutal
And takes courage to parental

Courage is in each of us
If you dig down deep enough
It’s courage when disaster strikes
That’s what courage’s is all about
it didnt take me long to write this so there has to be something wrong with it
EDIT IT PLEASE!
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brutal would be nice ^-^

[Todd]

Hello Cris, well this draft may not have taken you long, but you've writing this, and thinking about it for awhile. I loved all of Jennifer's edits. I would just suggest two minor things.

And takes courage to parental

I would keep your parallel structure in place and replace "And" with "It"

I would also pull this stanza out of sequence, and make it your final stanza:

You may not be the smartest
The strongest or the brightest
But knowing what you can achieve
Will pass the final test

Give it some thought, but in any event. This is a much stronger version than your previous ones, and you can be proud of the work you've put in.

Nicely done.