Poetry in the making??

[Rebecca]

please tell me ur honest opinion about my poem! i am 13 yrs old and i would like to be a poet when i grow up, so would somebody please tell me what i could do to make this poem better? or just tell me how u like it.

The Waiting: by Rebecca

silent, silent, silent.
i wander down the path so leering,
waiting, wanting, wishing, fearing.
silent silent silent

silent silent silent
i helplessly cannot deny
i must keep waiting, cannot lie,
the reason for the dark and dreary,
waiting that is 'o so weary
lies beneath a foolish love,

but without warning comes a shove,
cast out, am i from weary waiting,
instead, pushed into dreadful hating,
of one who forced an unfair shove,
and interfered with new found love.
silent, silent, silent.

[Freakin' Jesus]

The second stanza, mostly because it is without the densely packed repetitions of the first, is much richer with diction and imagery, is incredibly good in my opinion.
Your good at it, it seems, so feel free to practice and play around with poetry and form for a few years (I myself have several dozen poems of varying caliber), but do not, I say, do NOT, become a poet (poetry is not popular enough today to warrant it being an occupation, though still feel free to publish your poems on the side of another, possibly more viable career.)