Thread: Another for comment?

Why

Fix something
If it's not broken?
Am I in need of repair?
Vexed.


Temari

No, as far as I can tell, though improving on ones self can always bring about a better view from which to decide on any repair.

I think you have a good point to start on but, if you wrote a more elaborate poem on any of those topics then it would be great. like, write about not fixing something if it isn't broken and why would anyone need to?

The whole thing seemed very... hackneyed to me. Its like, cliche after cliche. I think that if you took this idea and used phrases that you haven't heard a million times, you could take this piece to the next level. I would like to read some of your other poems. You seem to be very gifted at writing.

its not really broken on the surface.....but i think it has cracked in the inside....asking means somethings really wrong with it...can't just find it because its inside....so searched....to be repaired